Co-dependant (revised)
I poured his seventh can of golden beer, ignored that I was kept inside his stein,prepared a meal with scarring doubt and fear.He dipped his bread in my dry bloody wine,left crumbs like no betrayer...
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poo-head--Finally! Only took me 6 months to get you here.You definitely have a strong bent for the terza rima sonnet,and I think this may be your best. A very powerful portrait.My only real nit is...
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Howard --Thanks for the encouragement. I never claimed to be quick!! Poo-head <--- shy, is all heheheI appreciate your feedback on the sonnet. It was M2 that suggested the title. As for the hearing...
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Hi, Peg.Welcome! I hope you'll like it out here.A slave to the terza rima sonnet? Well - a fine addiction, I'd say. Get hooked on more sonnet formats and everything will be 'all right', to speak with...
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Dutch--Thank you for the welcome!! And hey, I'm here for just what you gave me, an honest look at my sonnet, thanks.Hmm, difficulties in every line? eek!! I'm glad you at least pointed out a few to...
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Hi, Peg.Glad you didn't take it too hard.Yeah, about L14 - I thought about this scansion too. It's all right, in hindsight - I guess. It's purely a pronunciation question, a subjective matter.Regards,...
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Hey, Peg, queen of the TR. This is great -- you've really grown into terza rima sonnets.Let me heartily disagree with Dutch. I had no problem here with the meaning, found it very accessible, creative,...
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I've corrected the meter in L11 by adding temple... maybe it works?Howdy Tom--Thanks for the welcome and adjusting my crown, I thought it was beginning to slide off. I have enjoyed the TR sonnet,...
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Hi, Tom."Howard caught the metrical nits." -- Where HERE?? I, Dutch Crispin, did - only one, actually [L11]. LOL "Ich mchte nicht verwechselt werden." (Nietzsche)Hi, Peg!"I've corrected the meter in...
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Hey Dutch--Tom was talking about the metrical nits on Retaining Substances.Yeah, looks like I'm going to have to give up the hearing through the eyes! hehehe, now it seems silly even though I had a...
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Hi, Peg.As to commenting: just give it a try. I'm sure you'll do fine. XOXORegards & greetings, Dutch
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Thanks Dutch-- Not being very good at commenting meant that I haven't been good at actually doing it. But, it's true that I might be reluctant based on my lack of knowledge but I will give it a go....
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H'lo Peg,I've been watching this scene unfold and looking for an excuse to join the conversation, but in the absence of useful comment I'll just pipe up to join in welcoming you. I do have a couple of...
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Mary--Firstly, thank you for the welcome. You never need an excuse to pipe in, please do anytime.The Terza Rima Sonnet consists of this pattern: ABA... BCB... CDC... DED... EEIambic PentameterHere is...
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Thanks Peg, I'll look into TR. I should have been more specific on the other question. Co-dependency I understand (heck, I could've been a poster child for it in earlier years) but with the Last...
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Hello Peg.This is characteristically complex. Unlike Tom, I didn't get it straight away, but I did after several readings.I'm happy to spend the time on your work because it's subtle and rewarding....
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G'morning Mary--xx=kisses oo=hugs This is sort of my ta ta for now sign-off.OK, I'm at least glad that you considered the title. I figured that you'd know what codependancy means but I answered the...
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David--How do? I made it finally. I assure you that this Poodlehead won't miss any more parties around here! As you know, I make it a point to be goofy so I should fit in. Yeah, I'm saying that you...
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